The Holiday reviews

Big build up -- then you cut it off as it starts to warm up. No one likes that.

yeh definatly needs to be longer, but otherwise pretty well done

hey just wanted to let you know that i thought ur story was great...it had an actual story to it. it didnt just jump straight into the sex, very well done and keep up the good work....feel free to review my stories they are both in group sex stories and one is called 'work' and the other is 'a nice stroll in the park....' by katie johns thanx and once again great story

I enjoyed your story but the other people are right, it was cut off a bit towards the end. The writing style was simple which made it easy to read and follow. Good start.

if u decide to write a sequel, which u should it would make this good story a great one...keep up the good work