Talk about Heaven reviews
Needs a bit of work with a grammar book and spell checker -- paragraphs way too long -- better handling of dialogue -- nice try.
your getting better at your storys! I agree with LucQuarm on the grammer and spelling, but i think it was a great story either way.
damn that was pretty good. I dont care about writin style - that was good. Shame you didnt age the girls but cool all the same. Thanks
Nice Story a few errors but other wise reall good.
Nice Story.I did see a few Errors.Other wise im impressed with the story
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His sister is the object of all his fantasies, so much so that, as soon as the house is empty, he finds himself going through her underwear drawer. Only, he gets caught by their Dad, who makes him go from sniffing sister's panties to wearing them. Daddy's also turned on by his hot daughter and has just found a useful substitute! |
Stories By Niche:
- indian
- short
- ghost
- porn
- scary
- bedtime
- bdsm
- spanking
- adult
- inspirational
- funny
- love
- xxx
- cuckold
- hot
- bondage
- motivational
- horror
- moral
- black
- romantic
- bible
- wedgie
- femdom
- real wife
- diaper
- sissy
- mind control
- gangbang
- milf
- threesome
- success
- female masturbation
- christmas
- foot fetish
- erotica
- bullying
- dirty
- naughty
- taboo
- fuck
- blowjob
- facesitting