Sally reviews

This fiction is nice, and boy...this story has taught me how should I turn my girlfriend on...and make my female friends hot. Thanks A...dar...

ok, theres a bunch of things wrong with this one. the descriptions are nice but the way they talk and the way the story goes in kind of pointless. i mean, the guys like, "oh, im gonna share you with my friends, but if you dont let me, i wont fuck you." wtf is that??? i mean seriously, the reality of the dialogue in this is non-existant. stop writing man, you suck.

That was fucking retarded.

The dialogue was poorly spaced and oddly punctuated, but this was otherwise a nice first effort.

hey loved your story add part 2 soon