Rick & Kobe reviews
Well i think that you should use a little more punctuation. I felt like i was reading one big sentence! use some periods every once in while. you would be surprised at how much it effects the story.
The sentence structure was horrible. There was nothing but one run-on sentence after another. I couldn't get into the context of the story becuase of the lack of grammar and sentence stucture.
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It was a hot humid summer day. Thunder storm warnings had been issued all over the state. The sun was going down and I had a feeling we would be in for a long stormy night... |
Stories By Niche:
- indian
- short
- ghost
- porn
- scary
- bedtime
- bdsm
- spanking
- adult
- inspirational
- funny
- love
- xxx
- cuckold
- hot
- bondage
- motivational
- horror
- moral
- black
- romantic
- bible
- wedgie
- femdom
- real wife
- diaper
- sissy
- mind control
- gangbang
- milf
- threesome
- success
- female masturbation
- christmas
- foot fetish
- erotica
- bullying
- dirty
- naughty
- taboo
- fuck
- blowjob
- facesitting