Rick & Kobe reviews
Well i think that you should use a little more punctuation. I felt like i was reading one big sentence! use some periods every once in while. you would be surprised at how much it effects the story.
The sentence structure was horrible. There was nothing but one run-on sentence after another. I couldn't get into the context of the story becuase of the lack of grammar and sentence stucture.
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Before I could even say anything else, her lips met mine. She kissed me softly. It was a perfect kiss. My pussy grew wetter. She broke our kissed, and looked into my eyes... |
Stories By Niche:
- indian
- short
- ghost
- porn
- scary
- bedtime
- bdsm
- spanking
- adult
- inspirational
- funny
- love
- xxx
- cuckold
- hot
- bondage
- motivational
- horror
- moral
- black
- romantic
- bible
- wedgie
- femdom
- real wife
- diaper
- sissy
- mind control
- gangbang
- milf
- threesome
- success
- female masturbation
- christmas
- foot fetish
- erotica
- bullying
- dirty
- naughty
- taboo
- fuck
- blowjob
- facesitting