Rick & Kobe reviews
Well i think that you should use a little more punctuation. I felt like i was reading one big sentence! use some periods every once in while. you would be surprised at how much it effects the story.
The sentence structure was horrible. There was nothing but one run-on sentence after another. I couldn't get into the context of the story becuase of the lack of grammar and sentence stucture.
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There she lay exhausted, physically and emotionally spent. Her body was covered in thin layer of perspiration, her breast were rising and falling in perfect synchronization with the pulsating, throbbing contraction of her recently fucked pussy... |
Stories By Niche:
- indian
- short
- ghost
- porn
- scary
- bedtime
- bdsm
- spanking
- adult
- inspirational
- funny
- love
- xxx
- cuckold
- hot
- bondage
- motivational
- horror
- moral
- black
- romantic
- bible
- wedgie
- femdom
- real wife
- diaper
- sissy
- mind control
- gangbang
- milf
- threesome
- success
- female masturbation
- christmas
- foot fetish
- erotica
- bullying
- dirty
- naughty
- taboo
- fuck
- blowjob
- facesitting