Melanie reviews

I am going to take a wild guess and assume the author of this story is male. It is poorly written with multiple errors in dialouge and phrasing. Half your sentences do not even make sense. I am didn't even consider reading the second half.

You insisted, so I read it... and didn't like it. Verb tense shifts, poor phrasing, misspellings, etc don't help this underdeveloped story at all. Try harder.

um. i think porn pictures have more story to them than this. and better grammar. yes, that makes no sense, but neither do this. ew, i'm such a chameleon.