Me and the girls from work reviews
The absolute first thing you need to do is read what you wrote, edit your changes, go back reread a paragraph at a time and do re-editng. You have too may sentence fragments, they are fine to make a point but should be used with caution. I liked the story concept and think you did a really good job for your first story.
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I have this buddy Chad is his name. He and I have been having sex for the last 5 years. We have done and tried everything we could think of. One of our favorite things we did, was when I would drive somewhere, he would give me head all the way there, then he would drive home and I would suck his cock all the way home. Two years ago he went and got married. I kind of thought that would be the end of us... |
Stories By Niche:
- indian
- short
- ghost
- porn
- scary
- bedtime
- bdsm
- spanking
- adult
- inspirational
- funny
- love
- xxx
- cuckold
- hot
- bondage
- motivational
- horror
- moral
- black
- romantic
- bible
- wedgie
- femdom
- real wife
- diaper
- sissy
- mind control
- gangbang
- milf
- threesome
- success
- female masturbation
- christmas
- foot fetish
- erotica
- bullying
- dirty
- naughty
- taboo
- fuck
- blowjob
- facesitting