Kirsten's Incestuous Orgy reviews

Previous review is right on the mark. The story begins in a journalistic style, as if all the author wants is to report the events. Then some dialogue is added and the story comes to life. Soon it becomes too busy with little detail and description: too much in too little space and time.

I suppose it could be more detailed, but as it happens, this story was primarily directed at introducing a lot of ideas, unfortunately, it seems, at the expense of specifics. Useful input, though, since it will help me improve that weakness. What sort of specifics, for instance, could be added to this particular story- they might be included in the sequel.

You seem to be seeking psychological data here- more about their mindset as they break a major taboo- am I correct?

Ok dude that well to tell the truth it sucked balls. You need to focus more on the details and since it was a sex story the fact that there fucking not just a casual thing. I mean like saying he fucked her and that was it isnt enouigh you need to add how his rythm went and all that stuff and make it realistic as in a guy wont jizz over like 6 times in a few moments. and wehn karl came in he would have been like "HOLY SHIT" not ok lets fuck do you get what im saying?

FYI, Xander, while a man's dick would be pretty sore after so much sex, he could have been stimulated to ejaculate quite a few times by the penetration of his anus, which would have aroused him and put pressure on the prostate, which is the major gland responsible for erections. Hence, I included a lot of strap-on sex, with Dan getting it a lot in the butt from his girlfriends and wife.