First time on the beach reviews

It is obvious that this author has a good deal of potential, but has not matched the style of writing correctly. In an erotic tale of any kind, it is not just about telling a story rather than the arousement and indeed sexual enjoyment of any individual. The story has a good setting, but follows a rigorous and predictable sequence of events which destroys the suprise and consequently the excitement of the story. Keep up the stories and try writing less from your mind and more from your heart. I see a budding storyteller with a boundless amount of skill and passion just waiting to be found.

It should be slowed down some, but other than that it's a fine story.

i think this author is really good considering this was her first story. I also believe we can expect great things to cum from her.

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