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Posted by Caroline

WOW AWESOME. AMAZING story. I'm 19 years old.. and this was incredibly written. Honestly the best story I've ever read on here by far.. romantic, fun, silly... well written. I had the BEST visual the whole time. I feel like you seriously wrote this story about me.. I was the girl. I LOVED THIS. SERIOUSLY. Please please please write so so so so much more!

Posted by YesterdayOnceMore

Thanks, dear readers, for the encouragement. I'll give some thought to the third story. Watch this space!

Posted by Jin

The description seems too much to the point. Like the point of your description is to help the reader visualize. but your intentions are made too clear. Try to ease the reader in by either making all of your writing slow, descriptive and sensual, or quick, concise and gratifying.

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