All Alone On The Bus reviews
Good idea spoiled by atrocious spelling, bad punctuation and little development.
This could have been a great story, but your poor layout, puncuation, grammar, and spelling totally destroyed the atmosphere. Try taking writing lessons.
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I go to a club with my friend and leaving with the girl of my dreams and her sister... |
Stories By Niche:
- indian
- short
- ghost
- porn
- scary
- bedtime
- bdsm
- spanking
- adult
- inspirational
- funny
- love
- xxx
- cuckold
- hot
- bondage
- motivational
- horror
- moral
- black
- romantic
- bible
- wedgie
- femdom
- real wife
- diaper
- sissy
- mind control
- gangbang
- milf
- threesome
- success
- female masturbation
- christmas
- foot fetish
- erotica
- bullying
- dirty
- naughty
- taboo
- fuck
- blowjob
- facesitting