After School reviews
This story is neither !!! or !?! Having most sentences overly exclamatory becomes boring. Dialogue treatment needs to be improved.
Learn how to use the enter key. And the period button as well.See that? Learn what that is, and then use it.
the dialouge confused me.
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She was the sexiest bombshell I ever met. Dark brown hair, black eyes, full red lips, a symmetrical figure : 36-34-36, smooth fair skin and at the age of 19 this combination could be deadly. She is 5 ft. 2 in. in height, as one of my friends in the army always told me, 'compact bombs carry a deadly payload.' |
Stories By Niche:
- indian
- short
- ghost
- porn
- scary
- bedtime
- bdsm
- spanking
- adult
- inspirational
- funny
- love
- xxx
- cuckold
- hot
- bondage
- motivational
- horror
- moral
- black
- romantic
- bible
- wedgie
- femdom
- real wife
- diaper
- sissy
- mind control
- gangbang
- milf
- threesome
- success
- female masturbation
- christmas
- foot fetish
- erotica
- bullying
- dirty
- naughty
- taboo
- fuck
- blowjob
- facesitting