After School reviews
This story is neither !!! or !?! Having most sentences overly exclamatory becomes boring. Dialogue treatment needs to be improved.
Learn how to use the enter key. And the period button as well.See that? Learn what that is, and then use it.
the dialouge confused me.
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"Well, Winnie," Karen replied smoothly, "our gym has very competitive rates with other gyms in the area, but with one big exception, we don't have any men to interrupt and bother us, so you can more or less let your hair down and get your work done without worrying about your appearance, but the only way you can really see if WPG is for you is to stop in look it over for yourself!!!"... |
Stories By Niche:
- indian
- short
- ghost
- porn
- scary
- bedtime
- bdsm
- spanking
- adult
- inspirational
- funny
- love
- xxx
- cuckold
- hot
- bondage
- motivational
- horror
- moral
- black
- romantic
- bible
- wedgie
- femdom
- real wife
- diaper
- sissy
- mind control
- gangbang
- milf
- threesome
- success
- female masturbation
- christmas
- foot fetish
- erotica
- bullying
- dirty
- naughty
- taboo
- fuck
- blowjob
- facesitting