A day at the hotel with my bestfriend reviews

Great first story!made want to read more...

A pretty good first time but I would suggest that after you finish writing it go back and read it to iron the kinks out. Most of the time something you wrote in a sentence won't make sense when you read the story even thought it seemed to make sense while writing it. I always proof read it, make corrections and read it again to make sure the story flows and everything makes sense.

i lied it it was good cant wait to read part 2 hope it's as good

gee you aren't scared to be rude are you?, thakns for the well considered response. Maybe men and women should also work seperately so the poor men who can't control their primal urges don't have to be placed in harms way by the terribe provacative women. oh, by the way that was sarcasm, I wouldn't want you to think I wasn't, just in case.