A Sin Come True reviews
So what... you made an effort. I think that you need to do some more organizational work and learn how to handle dialogue. This looks like a first draft, one that needed a few more hours of work.
i liked the story to it was good you should maybe write a part 2 like your old friends find out you maried your old teacher. or somthign like that
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"Who all did you invite?" "Earnie and his sister, Nellie, and her boyfriend, Sal." "OW WOW! Nellie's some hot number! Do you think she's fucking her brother?" "I wouldn't doubt it. Nellie gets it on with everybody. I don't think she makes any exceptions with relatives... |
Stories By Niche:
- indian
- short
- ghost
- porn
- scary
- bedtime
- bdsm
- spanking
- adult
- inspirational
- funny
- love
- xxx
- cuckold
- hot
- bondage
- motivational
- horror
- moral
- black
- romantic
- bible
- wedgie
- femdom
- real wife
- diaper
- sissy
- mind control
- gangbang
- milf
- threesome
- success
- female masturbation
- christmas
- foot fetish
- erotica
- bullying
- dirty
- naughty
- taboo
- fuck
- blowjob
- facesitting